
Surrounded by beauty, their eyes
craved what they thought they were denied.
Human hearts are ne’er satisfied.
For them, God cried. For them, God cried.
From Eden, they were cast away.
What lot for hearts that went astray –
to bear sorrow in all their days.
For hope, they pray. For hope, they pray.
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The poem is a monotetra. The form is attributed to Michael Walker and it requires a four line stanza with eight (8) syllables and a monorhyme. The last line contains two metrical feet – essentially, a four syllable half line that is repeated. There is no limit to the number of stanzas.
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Have never heard of this form. I really do learn something every day at dVerse! Thanks so much for posting. This image could very well be an idyllic contemporary view of the Garden of Eden in all its glory.
Thanks, Lillian. 🙂
I find that short poetic forms help me with writing especially when the muse is out.
I like the idea of craving what we thought we were denied.
Love the form with that repetition… would make a wonderful song.
Interesting monorhyme form. With the right content, like yours, rather than mechanical, it helps channel the focus into the quiet, lyrical telling. Beautiful!
It is a nice form, isn’t it? I’ve been looking for inspiration to write and been searching for short poetry forms for the purpose.
My first time to know about this form ~ The last line of each stanza carried it for me, Imelda ~ Thanks for joining us ~
I learned about it only recently, too, when I was looking for ways to court the muse back. 🙂
Brilliant! Actually, I uploaded a ‘Monorhyme’ poem of my own onto my blog a few days ago. It’s linked below. I’d love it you read over it and gave me some advice on how to improve or on what you think of the poem, because you’re a very talented writer. Thank you!
https://poeticaparadisum.wordpress.com/2018/04/29/stagelike-thrills-monorhyme/