Words, once set free, blend in the wind
breathing a timeless existence;
Some grow wings to fly to heaven
They ask gifts for the gentle tongue
Breathing a timeless existence,
words illuminate our soul
Memories do falter in time
consequences of words live on.
When I was thinking of a challenge to post in Jill’s collaborative poetry challenge, I was thinking of writing a Quatern. I love the repeating patterns in a Quatern. I think I love shadow poetry in general. But, as I was reading about Quaterns again, I came across another shadow poetry form that I have not done yet, a Retourne. I thought it will be a lovely form to try. Essentially, a Retourne is a poem that has 4 quatrains with 8 syllables on each line. The lines do not need to rhyme. In a Retourne, next three lines of the first stanza become the first line of the succeeding quatrains. As you can see, I used the second line of the first stanza to begin the first line of the second stanza. So, the third stanza should have the third line of the first stanza as the first line, and so on.
I invite you to please please finish this piece. I am excited to see the directions that this little piece will take. Thank you very much. DO visit Jill’s page for other entries. You may be enticed to write your own challenge, too. 🙂
17 thoughts on “WORDS (A Retourne for Jill’s September Casting Bricks Collaborative Poetry)”
Oh, what fun! Thanks for the Challenge and for joining in. I look forward to working on this one 🙂
My pleasure, Jilly. I look forward to your piece. I really like this project of yours. 🙂
We have been having a bit of fun with it 🙂
I am glad. 🙂
This was a lot of fun! See what you think: https://lifeinportofino.wordpress.com/2017/09/15/the-eternity-of-words-imeldacharley/
I’ll work on completing this. 🙂
Thanks, Jenna. I look forward to your take. 🌸😊
Here is my take on it!
i had a go, too! https://wordpress.com/post/fmmewritespoems.wordpress.com/3307
this might be a better link https://fmmewritespoems.wordpress.com/2017/09/17/words-casting-bricks
Today is set aside for completing your Retourne and I must say I like this form!! I’ll be back around with the final product and then read the other ones! This just lights up my day! Off to write 🙂
Here it is!