We should be dancing in the rain. We used to laugh with abandon, Everyday was the first of spring. Could we have exhausted the spring that made us celebrate the rain? Our carefree youth we abandon. Winter tried us with abandon But together we meet this spring and smile under its cleansing rain. May the rain not abandon us to a dry spring. The poem was written for Jane Dougherty's Poetry Challenge: Spring in the Park. Using the above painting by Cornoyer as inspiration, Jane asked us to write a Tritina - a 10 line poem with three stanzas of three lines each, and a tenth sentence. Three words form the motif of the poem. they become the ending words of the lines in this pattern: 1, 2, 3; 3, 1, 2; and 2, 3, 1. The last sentence uses all three words in the order 1, 2, 3. Rain and spring were the dominant themes of the painting to me. For some reason, I picked "abandon" as the third word. I guess, it is because, when I saw the picture, a certain solemnity and sadness radiated from the characters. Thanks for dropping by. Linking with DVerse's Poets Open Link Night.
I think you’re right about the tone of the painting. It isn’t all happiness.
At first, I though that this was a spring tryst. But the people were not particularly romantic. But they were comfortable with each other and with their current environment- so there must be something between them.
There must be. Whether it’s at the point of breaking, reached a crucial point, that’s for the spectator to decide.
So so beautiful! 💖
Thanks, Trini. 🙂
Lovely, well done.
Thanks.
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In this I feel the pain of growing up… how difficult it is when you are older not to bend you face to the rain and simply laugh.
Yeah..growing up, getting older, being more sober, were themes I was thinking of with this piece.
Lovely poem about the seasons in life and growing up.
Thanks, Toni. 🙂
Gorgeous gorgeous.
Thanks, Laurie. 🙂
Wow I like this!
Thanks. 🙂
Well written Tritina.
Thanks. 🙂
Somehow I saw the hope for the spring to be eternal though. A good share Imelda. Wishing you happy weekend.
Thanks, Grace. 🙂
I do like the thought of a cleansing rain…
I know what you mean about the third word. “Abandon” does seem to match somehow.
Love this one, I think you used the form really well.
Thanks, Mei-mei. 🙂
I love how well the form works for this, Imelda. There is such wistfulness in this, a lot of atmosphere. May love re-blossom.
Thank you, Victoria. 🙂
A beautiful interpretation of the painting. Thank you for introducing me to this interesting form of poetry.
Thanks, Josslyn. Head on over to Jane’s page. She posts her prompts on Tuesdays, I think, and we have a week to participate. I am learning a lot from her.
Beautiful. Just beautiful.
Thanks. 🙂