We should be dancing in the rain.
We used to laugh with abandon,
Everyday was the first of spring.

Could we have exhausted the spring
that made us celebrate the rain?
Our carefree youth we abandon.

Winter tried us with abandon
But together we meet this spring
and smile under its cleansing rain.

May the rain not abandon us to a dry spring. 


The poem was written for Jane Dougherty's Poetry Challenge:  Spring in the Park.  Using the above painting by Cornoyer as inspiration, Jane asked us to write a Tritina - a 10 line poem with three stanzas of three lines each, and a tenth sentence.  Three words form the motif of the poem.  they become the ending words of the lines in this pattern:  1, 2, 3; 3, 1, 2; and 2, 3, 1.  The last sentence uses all three words in the order 1, 2, 3.  

Rain and spring were the dominant themes of the painting to me.  For some reason, I picked "abandon" as the third word.  I guess, it is because, when I saw the picture, a certain solemnity and sadness radiated from the characters.

Thanks for dropping by. 

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31 thoughts on “RAIN

    1. At first, I though that this was a spring tryst. But the people were not particularly romantic. But they were comfortable with each other and with their current environment- so there must be something between them.

    1. Thanks, Josslyn. Head on over to Jane’s page. She posts her prompts on Tuesdays, I think, and we have a week to participate. I am learning a lot from her.

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