all is quiet
inside
nothing stirred
the senses are wanting
the scent of roses
the golden sunbeams
the song of birds
have left
a vacuum
nothing stirred
all is quiet
inside
featureless grey.
~~~
What is lack of inspiration/boredom is a room? Here is my take on DVerse’s Poetics prompt for today.
Sometimes the ‘vacuum’ felt in a room is overpowering. I feel that sense in your poem. The emptiness is palpable here.
I can feel the emptiness in this room. Well done.
Empty and lonely. As we move from room to room, we always leave something behind!
I like this…empty page as room, perhaps. White walls, waiting.
I love how profound this is….!!
Nice poem, Imelda. Vacuum, empty, how apt. Lost with no where to turn. Hope you’ve been well 🙂
Thanks, Mabel. I am doing well just a little busy. I have a six week old bbay to take care of in addition to the older four. 🙂
That’s exactly how a room feels when there’s a lack of inspiration…well done!
I hate that when it happens ~ Hey, good to see you Imelda at D’verse ~ Hope you are well 🙂
Hi, Grace. Thanks for dropping by. I am well, just a little busy with a little baby. He, and his four brothers, make sure there is no time for thinking and such. 🙂
An apt description of depression.
perfect description of an empty room
Very Well Done.
Nice to see you back at dVerse Imelda… I agree on how the emptiness sometimes is so overpowering… it’s like the vacuum has weight.
the emptiness without sunshine is foreboding…very atmospheric….
I love this line: “the senses are wanting”
What you did with the three repeated lines was very effective and evocative.
The closing line speaks of aging and death as well as sorrow and emptiness.
Well done. Shorter pieces are my favorites; I find them to be more powerful.
Thanks, Em, for dropping by and for the comment. Your words make me see the piece in a different light. And, if you did not mention it, I would not have noticed that I repeated three, instead of just two, lines. 🙂
Something I know very well. Exceptionally well said Imelda. You do have such a beautiful way with words. 😀 ♥
Hi, Sonel. Good to see you. 🙂 Thanks for dropping by.
So much said with so little and a room can be such an empty place.
So sad. All my rooms are full of toys, games, books, sweaters thrown on chairs and school work.
Rooms away from
Nature all walls
all ceilings
all wanting
oF colors
Life..:)