Alone, I floated in my dark little world
but for the beat by which I lived,
silence ruled.

There, I bided the time
When I’d see the light
while warmed by gentle arms
coddling me close to the heart.

But my solitude was broken
by hands steely and cold.
Deaf to my silent screams,
they snatched me amid pain untold.

Alas! My dreams were no more.
They’re simple – just To BE
I dared not ask why
my mother didn’t want me.


This piece was written for Bloggy Moms Writers’ Workshop. This picture is this week’s prompt –

Thank you for dropping by. Β Your comments Β and visit are always much appreciated.

I am not so sure about whether my piece was an appropriate response or whether it is comprehensible at all. Β But like a dutiful student, I did my homework. πŸ˜‰


11 thoughts on “UNBORN

  1. I feel like a fetus just waiting to be born πŸ™‚ very picturesque phrases, and they fit into the verses too! Thanks for sharing !

    1. Thank you, Noel, for dropping by and for the nice comment of course. In literal translation of our idiom, it fattens my heart. πŸ˜‰

      1. you’re very welcome for that Counsel, but actually it wasn’t a moment later that I realized the “sad” ending of the poem! Still it gave me happiness just to read your lines and figure out what you were trying to build up. More power!

  2. Very powerful. Never doubt if your creativity is appropriate. You’re sharing amazing work! I see your writing taking off! Great job!!!!!!!!!!!!

  3. Oh it fits. Who am I to say it doesn’t? It’s merely an inspiration and you definitely were inspired. You build up the hope so well throughout the prose that I feel as sad at the ending as the character did. You took something very difficult to write about and made it beautiful just with your words. Amazing writing. You really are taking off.

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