A WINTRY NIGHT

Moon

Inky black cold
blankets the white snowy ground
howling wind protests -

Where’s the moon
quiet behind the clouds as
shadows roll by.

The fire glowed
warm bodies licked the cold
behind closed doors.

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The form that DVerse Poets’ Pub features today is La Lune.   It is inspired by the haiku and has either of these patterns:  the 5-3-5 syllabic pattern, or the 3-5-3 word pattern.  I opted for the latter.   I had nothing in mind until I went outside to get a package from the UPS man.  The first lines described what I saw, while the rest were added to make a little story.  My husband specially liked the last stanza. :-)

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Thank you for coming by.  I appreciate your presence and comments even when I am not quick with a reply.  :-)

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33 comments to A WINTRY NIGHT

  1. brian miller says:

    haha that last one is playful…smiles…what better way to keep warm on a cold night…you handled the form beautifully…

  2. Very nice…you’ve captured a cold wintery night perfectly and the best way to keep warm. :)

  3. Tony says:

    I love it when simple, every day things provide the spark for our muses to light onto. And I love the turn from outside to in, from public space to private in the last stanza.

  4. Good work on the form ~ I like the turn on the last stanza, warmth amidst the cold winter ~

  5. The last two lines are my favorites.

  6. Life&Ink says:

    I can see why he liked it. And who can blame you for delayed responses to comments, you are obviously very busy elsewhere! :-)

    • Imelda says:

      :-) unfortunately for my husband, I am busy with things that do not seem interesting to him. :-) On a more serious note, I can only focus on the blog at night after the children are asleep and I have to allot my time between visiting friends’ blogs and responding to comments. My normally short posts work for me because I can think about them while doing mundane stuff such as washing dishes. It does not take me long to type them and publish.

      Thank you for coming by, Life&Ink. Your time is much appreciated. :-)

  7. charityv says:

    warm bodies are one of my favorite ways to lick the cold. Well captured with your pen.

  8. rmp says:

    hmm…that last lune’s definitely looking to steam things up. I love the description of a wintry night.

  9. The contrast between the cold and the warmth between the opening stanzas and the closing verse is quite effective. Wonderfully done.

  10. marousia says:

    I like the middle one best :)

  11. naimavanswol says:

    This is beautiful, the photo and the words, too.

  12. siggiofmaine says:

    Love the photo and the haiku…wonderful and delightful. Inspiring too.

  13. claudia says:

    smiles…you balance well between cold and hot here..smiles..nicely done

  14. Other Mary says:

    This is why I love winter! Very good luna trio, and the picture you chose goes along with your words so well.

  15. Miriam E. says:

    “inky black cold” – what a line to start. love how you played with temperature here, beautifully crafted.

  16. adinparadise says:

    Your weather must be rather awful. I love the whole poem, but agree with your husband. That last stanza really rocks, and lifts the spirits :)

  17. This story fit so well into the rhythm of this format. Beautiful. I love the first and last line

  18. Imelda says:

    Thanks, Adin. :-) It can get truly cold here – the other night, we were down to -2.5 degrees F. Today, we felt ‘warm’ because the temperature rose to the 20s. :-D

  19. jannatwrites says:

    Lovely poem (and great picture, too.) The last stanza turned the heat up a little!

  20. Kelvin S.M. says:

    …Some playful intimate moments behind closed doors… And wouldn’t be tempted in such a cold night of stillness… very beautiful…smiles…

  21. OceanPhoenix says:

    I love that picture and your words are so beautiful and, yes – colorful, intense!

  22. Joy says:

    Love the picture and the poem:)

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